Monday, April 18, 2011

Brief Assignment Eight: Sentence Level Revision

In this assignment you will substantially revise a paragraph from your researched argument focusing on sentence level revision and using the chapter 42 of the e-handbook as a guide. Include in your assignment:

  1. Your thesis statement, for context
  2. Your original paragraph
  3. The revised paragraph
  4. A paragraph evaluating your revisions and their impact on the audience, purpose, and meaning of your draft as a whole

Below is a review of some sentence level constructions to look for as you revise your paragraphs. If you need any additional explanation, your e-handbook is a great resource for information and examples, especially chapters 30-46. 


Sentence style:

  • Emphasis- are the ideas that you want to emphasize at the end of your sentences?
  • Climactic order- are ideas arranged in increasing order of importance?
  • Conciseness- are there redundant words that you can eliminate? Are there any empty words or meaningless modifiers (absolutely, awfully, definitely, great, literally, really, very, etc.)
  • Replace wordy phrases- See page 685 of the e-handbook for a list of concise replacements for wordy phrases.
  • Coordination- make the precise relationship between ideas clear with the appropriate coordinators, either coordinating conjunctions or semicolons. 
  • Subordination- have you distinguished minor ideas from major ones with the appropriate subordinating conjunctions or dependent clauses?
  • Sentence variety- are the length of your sentences varied? Are the openings of your sentences varied, or do you finding several sentences in a row the same way?
  • Eliminate expletives- avoid starting sentences with there or it followed by a form of to be or other linking verb

Sentence Clarity and Grammar- Revise for:
  • Sentence fragments
  • Sentence sprawl
  • Misplaced and dangling modifiers
  • Faulty parallelism
  • Unclear pronoun reference
  • Pronoun agreement
  • Incorrect pronoun case
  • Omitted commas
  • Superfluous commas
  • Comma splices
  • Apostrophe errors
  • Words easily confused

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